The One That Got Away
Tom and Alexa share the sea,
The beacon of light on the rocky shore,
Would landmark those kindred to Tom,
Today Alexa pays the beacon no heed,
For she is in control,
Adrift without direction,
The rod discarded for a clutch of his chest,
Tom is at peace on her deck,
And Alexa will grieve for him in solitude,
For he is hers,
And she will keep him,
For herself
Poetry is all about feelings, I think. And I think this works on so very many levels.
ReplyDeleteAn emotionally charged piece. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteYeah, this works for me, sounds like a cool fishing trip!
ReplyDeleteGreat atmosphere to this piece.
ReplyDeleteFor she is in control,
ReplyDeleteAdrift without direction
Two contrasting actions so well said. Lovely poem
Sad. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteWell, I know just as little about poetry but I think Thom is right - emotion is everything and you had that in spades. Great piece, well told!
ReplyDeleteGreat job at shaping the feelings here.
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For saying you don't know much about poetry, you obviously feel much and then translate that feeling beautifully into words which is what makes an exceptional poem. Well done!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully worded and imaged!
ReplyDeleteYou have painted a very clear picture with your words.
ReplyDeletethis was a very fulfilling read packed with emotion. Great job!
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I think it's very hard to say what poetry is because poetry means different things to different people. Anyway, yours is a beautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteyou've captured that certain sadness very well
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